Five Sentence Fiction – Words

“Smile, you’re alive,” they said and so I smiled—or maybe it was just my mouth that formed into something that supposedly resembled a smile.

Something deep inside of me, a tiny voice somewhere in my head, it kept whispering into my ear that there was something missing, something wasn’t in its place, something about me was incomplete.

Words weren’t enough to make me feel alive.

I existed, but I ached for something more, something deeper, something much more intense.

“Breathe,” they said, like breathing was easy.

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Here are my five sentences written for this week’s FSF. Have any thoughts? Let me know!

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14 Comments Add yours

  1. Very nice wording. I almost found myself holding my breath and then breathing with the story.
    Scott

  2. Your words moved me. They have rhythm, carried me off with timing and purpose. I breathed because you made it easy.

    nice work.
    Randy

  3. raeme67 says:

    A little awed and not sure what to say, great writing.

  4. A Mushy Rat says:

    Well written as usual!
    Loved it!
    (My comments are starting to sound monotonous, aren’t they?)

    1. mrsreckless says:

      Haha, I’m always glad to see your comments. Thanks!

  5. “Like breathing was easy…” What an interesting thought. This piece invoked so much emotion. Lovely work.

    1. mrsreckless says:

      I’m glad you liked my work, thank you!

  6. Kate, you’ve framed this piece very well and the emotion comes through easily. I look forward to reading more from you. :))

    1. mrsreckless says:

      Thanks a lot! I look forward to writing more 😉

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